February 10, 2014

साथ साथ

क्या तुम्हें याद है वोह दिन
जब कुछ घबराये हुए
कुछ सकुचाऐ हुए

उस अप्रतिम उत्साह से
एक नयी राह पे...
हम साथ-साथ चले थे

अन्‍जानों में अपने ढूंढे
छोटे-छोटे पल, छोटी-छोटी खुशियाँ ज़माने से छीनी
मकानों को घर बनाया
हर एक दिन को यादगार बनाया

और कभी खुद को, कभी दुनिया को आज़माने भी तो...
हम साथ-साथ चले थे

फिर अचानक  लकीरों के खेल में तुम आगे निकल गए
मैं हारता रहा और तुम जीतते रहे
अब मिलन होना सम्भव नहीं
मेरी हस्ती का होकर भी कोई महत्व नहीं

पर जब कभी धूल के गुबार को छोड़
सरपट आगे जाते हुए, पीछे देखो
तो बस इतना याद करना कि

कोई था जो गुम गया जीवन की इन गलियों में
कल की चाह में, कल को भुलाने में
उन सपनों की हकी़कत में
जिन्हें सीने से लगाये एक दिन

हम साथ-साथ चले थे...

बहुत दूर गया हूँ कहीं
आगे-पीछे का अब गुमान नहीं
अब बस मैं हूँ और हारने का एहसास हर कहीं
बहुत कुछ है दांव पर फिर भी
जीत की हर दुआ में तुझे ढूँढता हूँ

इन अंजानीं राहों में
तेरे निशान  ढूँढता हूँ

तुझे याद करने का हर एक बहाना  ढूँढता हूँ
बादलों में तेरा चेहरा
और पवन में तेरी आवाज़  ढूँढता हूँ

बहुत दिन हो गए सोए हुए आज
क्यूंकि आँखों में जो अक्स बसा है तेरा
हर रात पलकों से उसे  ढूँढता हूँ

तू बता

उस आसमान को देख कैसे तेरी याद ना आए
आखिर चांद को पाने और तारों को सरताज चढ़ाने के लिये भी तो

हम साथ-साथ चले थे...


  1. I read this poem before asking you that question. I don't know whether I am right or wrong...I feel you are still in love with someone. Or you miss what you had.

    As far as the poem goes, if it prompted me to ask you a personal question, I need not say how beautiful it is. :)

    1. I will neither agree nor disagree with your analysis for the sheer respect of the fact that I made someone think beyond the written word. Agreeing or disagreeing with it will trivialize both our efforts :).
      I think every poet tries to add a personal angle to their creation by either picking a personal topic or adding their perspective to a hypothetical one. Some just simply add their name or pen name in an artistic way in every poem. I am no different :).

      I am always very glad when you read and analyze my work as I want people to do.

      Thanks for visiting :)

    2. Hmmm... I rarely put my personal experiences in my poem. 'It hurts' and 'The day I drowned in my own tears' are two which can be categorized as personal. Though I always exaggerate what I observe.

      It's always a different experience reading your work. There is always some connect with all your posts. :-)

  2. Atee Uttam, Prateek. So much depth, so much pathos in your composition.

    1. Thanks a lot Purba. It was a little hard to pen it as I was writing Hindi after a long time but I am glad it got a good response and I could convey myself.

      As always, your opinion matters a lot to me, so thanks a lot for visiting!

  3. Heartfelt outpouring of a journey .... Well done!

  4. The best thing about this post is that it's written in Hindi. I've always loved reading poems in Hindi. And such deep emotions ! Touching , really. :)

    1. Somethings can only be expressed in the Mother Tongue :)
      Thanks for visiting!

  5. Pagle rulayega kya... Shadi tuwadaega kya :)

    1. ha ha..thanks bhai...bhabhi ke samne V-day par padhna mat isko :D

  6. Mathur Saab..Ab kya kahe..Sab kuch understood hai..Bahut shandaar likha hai :)

  7. Great story of success for few and failure for others that brings distance between individuals .... I loved to read it Dost !!!

    1. I am glad that somebody could finally read it in a gender-neutral and success-failure vein rather than just a love story...Welcome to the blog RJ :)

  8. Interesting writing Prateek .... one often keeps wondering what one has lost, what one has gained. .....redefining success and failure. ..and who or what was responsible for the distance. .....rishto ki duriya samajna mushkil hai.....

  9. Such a poignant write up Prateek..:)
    I just happened to visit to blog and I am totally gripped by your work..:)
    It's beautiful how you have in the name of love described yet so many emotions. Failures, success, distances and the aftermaths and what not.. in a few lines your have spoken with so much of depth that the poem stands out as really REALLY good..:)

  10. सुन्दर प्रस्तुति !
    आज आपके ब्लॉग पर आकर काफी अच्छा लगा अप्पकी रचनाओ को पढ़कर , और एक अच्छे ब्लॉग फॉलो करने का अवसर मिला !

    फुर्सत मिले तो .शब्दों की मुस्कुराहट पर आकर नई पोस्ट जरूर पढ़े....धन्यवाद :)


Now, it is time to be honest !